Monday, October 12, 2009

Nathan Bransford's 1st Paragraph Contest

Literary Agent Nathan Bransford is holding another 1st paragraph contest. You can find his blog here.  
I entered mine just for fun.  My WIP is far from done, but I like my first chapter.

This is a paragraph from my novel with the working title "The Shrouded Star."  Let me know what you think.

In a certain kingdom, in a certain realm, on the eve of the Nahe'dra rising, a cloud of smoke whisked across the night sky beneath a crescent moon. Black piercing eyes searched the inward curves of snow covered alps. Sharp teeth appeared as lips parted in a fearsome grin. Abruptly the cloud descended into the uninhabited depths of a dark forest. Twigs snapped and leaves rustled as a fierce wind swept through the trees.
       “She has arrived at last,” a voice whispered in the darkness.
       “Why is she making so much noise? It's enough to wake the dead,” whispered another.
       “Maybe that's the idea.”


Juju from Tales of Whimsy said...

*high five*
I dig!
*fingers crossed*
I hope you win! said...

Absolutely wonderful... which is why I clicked over here from Nathan's page to see who you are. :-)

Mary said...

JuJu - I dig you *high five* said...

Hey, Mary, I just caught up with your posts at myblog. Thanks for saying hi.

I got a kick out of the fact you thought my "entry" over there was fun. I did too.

But, I deleted the ones I sent in because, yes, I was trying to be funny... and I realized that wasn't fair to Nathan, nor to the terrifically good writers (like yourself) who were entering the contest.

Trust me, you're in the running. :-)

Diana Paz said...

Oh yes, this is definitely ready. Everything is clear and vivid in my mind. Love it, love it, love it!

Alaina said...

Absolutely love it! You are shooting for the stars girl. I can't wait to look up and see you there!